Ya classic war of the worlds, except without the real war I
guess. OK here's the plot, what I got so far. Need help with a few things
1.MC is banished to hell, the reasons for it = he was an assassin-in-training. His first real kill, fails. The king that ordered him to kill routes him out, saying that he had nothing to do with it and playing the innocent roll. {The royal blood line [only in the kings] can not sin in any circumstances because of popular, now tradition and more or less law, belief that all hell will rain down on the land/his kingdom} Anyway, by routing out his own assassin, he's comitted betrail. a.k.a Sin.
2.MC is banished to Hell. He spends around maybe a hundred years and no more is said on him in middle earth.
3.A soul that fell from heaven to hell told a little story to Satan. {Satan guards the gates of Hell} The secret "If any soul...any at all that was unworthy of heaven is to enter the gates if heaven, an unbalance would fall upon gods realm..." Satan loves the idea.
4.Satan and MC make a deal, {why its the MC, ill make a small tale for that} if Satan lets the MC back into middle earthand he kills the king, Satan will give the MC some sort of powers.{Heres where something comes in that I was discussing in another forum which spread out for around 50 odd post's. To be short, the giant 'evil pancake or evil blanket' is a great smoke mist/clouds that completely cover the earth.}
5.The king is still alive at a lovely age of 125 {another legacy for the Royal Blood Line} The king isnt your "I'm half dead and cant even move my own leg to pee in a corner so ill just do it right here" type of oldie, {Wow, just love that Royal Blood Line} fit as if he was 60 odd.
-King gets killed after some lengthy destruction chapters...
6.His soul reaches heaven and, cause he's a king, he's sent straight on through with flags flying.
7.The faithful unbalance becomes real.
8.All hell raises in heaven, eventually all the angelic guards are pulled from their post guarding heaven from unworthy souls and demons to find this unworthy soul in heaven already. King gets found eventually.
9. All while that runs around in heaven, MC is control peoples minds with his newly found powers {or it could just be kidnapping if anyone else has any idea's what he gains from Satan out of killing the king that betrayed him} and he's burning the bodies. The smoke emmited, he uses to create a great fog or mist/blanket over the world. {It works like this with the smoke = The souls go to heaven right, but the imaginations, fears, past torments, strength/melee abilities and so on go into the smoke, which makes it special I guess. It makes a fair bit more sense when I discussed it in another forum...took like 60 post's...} The smoke finally covers the entire earth, if the mist/blanket/fog brake's, not like lighting but well, not sure yet on its appearance, but something comes down and if the mist brake's, either cracks an entire chunk off the earth or just well, splits the earth in two.
10. The gods and angelic guards finally come from their search because the amount of souls that are coming to heavens gate, from the MC's mistic burning.
Thats as far as I got. I need help with how its resolved. I have figured out that >>>
AT THE END. The smoke that still cloaks the earth, angelic guards or something like that open the gates at the end of the world and the misty stuff falls of the sides of the world. {You see, in my world, people still believe the world is flat like their maps...thats hpw all this came around...an evil pancake created this story...http://www.fantasy-writers.org/forum.asp?forum=4§ion=17&post=262860&page=1 <<<}
The MC's reason for creating the smoke foggy {In this...ah, well eventually i can say he becomes a...power manic, he becomes corrupt. Satan grants him
the powers or w/e and he's more or less like "My life was taken away from me, I only did what i thought was right because of someone Else's
treachery...and i was banished to hell!!"}
Anyone has any comments, happy to hear. Any changes? Mainly, how do I resolve it? The MC goes nuts and creates the fog, what happens? Please help
