EDIT: It's actually about eight pages ... why does it always look so little on these websites! Anyway - what does anyone think?
EDIT EDIT: I know there are a few spelling mistakes but just ignore them. I can see them now I read it again.
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I'm writing a piece based on me and my friends spending Christmas Day together in the near future. The whole story covers just one day - 25th December - and features eleven characters, each bringing their own problems to the table, bumping together to provide some seasonal fireworks. This is the opening few pages and I wondered what people thought!
EDIT: It's actually about eight pages ... why does it always look so little on these websites! Anyway - what does anyone think? EDIT EDIT: I know there are a few spelling mistakes but just ignore them. I can see them now I read it again. |
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There was no snow on the ground, that Christmas morning. There never was. Louise felt the sun try to crowbar its way through the curtains but she wrapped her duvet around her and snuggled down deep into its welcoming, warm folds.
This Christmas, however, she had escaped the family. She didnt need to get up and drive the fifty or so miles down to her old home. With both of their children now having moved out, Ellen and Mick had set off for Spain to spend Christmas with Ellens sister. At a loss, Louise had offered her house up for a few of her old friends. Theyd always said that theyd eventually start spending Christmas Day together and this year they finally would. Louise curled up and put a pillow over her head to block out the sounds of chirruping birds. She couldnt hear Rob up yet. Rob was her brother. He had come down to the house on December the twenty-third as he lived so far away and he had had no better offers for his Christmas Day. Besides, he knew that his sister cooked a killer roast. The other guests were appearing around eleven oclock for present swapping and getting merry before settling down in the evening to eat and fall asleep in front of the television. Ellie was coming down to Brighton with her long-term fianc Dave. Theyd moved to London and so would probably just be leaving about now. Louise looked at the alarm clock it was 9.01. She had plenty of time yet. She rolled over again and considered the next guest, Lucy. Back in college, theyd all referred to Lucy as Fatty in ironic terms because she never gained any weight. Now, however, the times had changed and he was certainly a lot curvier than she was back then. The name was no longer used. Michael was coming too, driving down from Salisbury with his boyfriend of six months, Christian. Despite everyone trying to get together at least once a month and more if their schedules would allow it, none of them had met Christian yet and had only seen photos and video footage. Today they would meet the man himself. Louise had an image of Michael driving furiously down the motorway, his road rage starting to get the better of him. She smirked. Also coming was Tasha who had been the hardest friend to acquire. Her family had wanted her home for Christmas, as was the tradition, but Tasha felt she wanted to break away from her family, just for one year. She was coming from Portsmouth. The final guests were Harriet and Matt, the only married couple. They had been married for five years, ever since Harriet had finished university and had their first child on the way a girl who would be named Elizabeth. They were only coming from Hailsham. Everyone else had been busy or away for the Christmas season, and so it was just going to be the ten of them, celebrating Christmas altogether. Louise rose up and caught sight of herself in the mirror. Her hair was sticking up all over the place, as it always did if she even just laid her head on a pillow for half a second. She plodded to the bathroom and locked the door. In Wiltshire, Michael was running up and down the stairs of his house, all the while muttering something under his breath, cursing everything from the loose bit of carpet at the top of the stairs on which he had nearly tripped, to Jesus himself for being born on a freezing day. His patient boyfriend, Christian, waited on a stool in the kitchen, reading the book Michael had got him for Christmas. Were going to be so late, said Michael, running back down the stairs armed with two bags of Christmas presents hed left in the wardrobe. We will not, sighed Christian. Anyway, you always moan to me that Louise and Ellie are late for everything. Make them wait for a change. No, theyre late, Im always on time, said Michael. Dont argue with me, said Christian. Its Christmas Day. Im not arguing with you, said Michael. And its our first Christmas. Ill try to keep calm. OK, now Ill go and put these in the car and can you please check the back bedroom again for any presents Ive left behind? Christian sighed again but it was accompanied by a wink this time. He bounded up the stairs. Michael packed the boot, which was now laden with presents for everyone who was there today. He loved getting people presents; especially now he had the money. He was, however, not looking forward to the journey. Driving on the motorway was horrible enough but there was a thick frost this morning and Michael could feel it nip at him through his gloves and thick coat. Christian came out of the house and slammed the door behind him, locking it securely. He was carrying a gold shiny bag. Thats not one of mine, said Michael. No, said Christian, reaching him. Its another one for you from me. He leaned in and kissed Michael lightly on the cheek. Merry Christmas, he smiled. Do you want to drive the first half or shall I? Somewhere in Surrey, a silver Ford Ka with a wonky rear number plate was hurtling down the road, being driven by a man with very bush eyebrows who was under the complete control of the woman in the passenger seat. This was Ellie and Dave. Ellie was dozing slightly, still shattered from the previous night, but Dave was wide awake, focussing on the road ahead. He wished he could sleep, hed been just as tired and stayed out just as late, but he wasnt allowed to doze. Ellie controlled him. It was like a very subtle mind game. If Ellie told him to drive, he drove. If Ellie told him she didnt want sex, then neither did he. If Ellie had told him to commit suicide with her, he probably would have had to go through with it. But that makes their marriage sound so one-sided, so uneven, so horrible and loveless. It wasnt. They were madly in love with one another, but Ellie always managed to hold some kind of power over the men of the world. Any of them would do her bidding. Maybe it was her stunning beauty. Perhaps it was her bewitching eyes. It could even have been her apparent innocence and naivet that drew people in. Nobody knows, but nobody dared argue with her. Michael had scars to show what happened when you did. Ellie opened her eyes and looked out the window. The trees and bushes rushed past as they trundled through the countryside. Are you looking forward to today? said Dave. Hmm? Oh yeah, said Ellie, the enthusiasm having been long extracted from her voice many years ago. Itll be nice to see them again. Besides, we would only have spent the day just us two like we did last year and that was boring. No offence. None taken, I agree, said Dave. I still cant believe your parents are in New Zealand. They hated long haul flights. Well, when you win the lottery and you reach their age, youve got to make the most of it, smiled Ellie. When we get married Dave started, but was spoken over by Ellie saying, Do you mind if I put the radio on? Dave nodded and Ellie switched Radio 1 on. What did you say? she said, settling back into the seat. Nothing, never mind, said Dave. There was a pregnant pause. Hey, how bad do you think Michaels hair will be on a scale of one to ten? Eleven, said Ellie, not even opening her eyes. It always is. Dave sniggered and began to hum quietly along to the music as Ellie drifted in and out of sleep again. In Hailsham, Harriet and Matt were still in bed. The bed was too small for them. Matts feet stuck out the end and Harriet felt bloated and useless. She was carrying a seven-month-old foetus in her belly and she was bored of it. I just want her to get out, she whined. Surely seven months is enough. And I havent had sex in a bloody long time and I want sex! Matt rolled his eyes and fiddled with his glasses. Its not really much longer, said Matt. But the doctors said, didnt they, that you might not be able to have a sex life again for a while as things may be sore. What do they know? said Harriet. Holly had four kids and shes fine, still shagging my brother and getting up to all those kinky things they do. Matt did not want to hear about Harriets sister-in-law this morning. Last time theyd met there had been a massive row. It wasnt sorted yet. We could try said Matt tentatively. Yes, we will, said Harriet. She hauled herself up slightly as Matt manoeuvred around the bed. They tried for a few minutes before Matt gave up and collapsed back on the bed. Its no good, shes in the way, he said. Harriet slapped her belly, as if chastising her unborn child. Im going in the shower, she said, easing herself off the bed and waddling to the bathroom. And dont start masturbating just because youve got the room to yourself. We need to get up and get going. Harriet? What? Merry Christmas, Matt smiled. They hadnt said it yet. Merry Christmas, Harriet returned the smile before going along to the bathroom, leaving the door wide open, stripping off and getting in the shower. Thanks for picking me up Tasha, said Lucy, leaning in the window of the green Skoda Octavia that her friend was driving. Ive got a test booked for January, I promise you. I will learn soon. Just count yourself lucky I come down past you, smiled Tasha. Here, Ive opened the boot if you want to dump your presents in. Lucy stomped round to the boot of the car and put a large carrier bag of brightly wrapped gifts inside. She slammed it shut and came back round to get in the front next to her old friend. They hugged clumsily, knocking the gear stick and causing the car to stall. Ooh, sorry, said Lucy. I didnt mean to do that. Tasha waved it aside and started the car up again. They began to drive out of Lucys estate. You look well, said Tasha, even though she knew that Lucy was certainly larger than she had been two months ago when theyd last seen each other. Thanks Tash, Ive lost like five pounds this month, said Lucy. You look well too. Are you still seeing that Adam guy? Christ no! laughed Tasha. No, I finished with him in November. Didnt I say? Wed only been together like two months and he had started banging on about marriage and stuff. I had to get out of there. How about you? Are you seeing anyone? No, well, no, well, maybe, said Lucy. Tasha didnt say anything, knowing full well that Lucy would explain. Do you remember that guy I was dating throughout most of university? Carl? No, the other one, Tony. Oh yes. Well, weve been talking again recently and I think he wants to get back together. But we tried that a couple of years ago and it was just like it was the first time around it was just non-stop arguments, then I started putting on the weight. Lucy lapsed into silence. Tasha had a feeling that she hadnt been able to talk to alone properly about it since she was, out of all of them, the loneliest of the old crew. She always had been popular, but at university she began to lose favour with the original crew as she spent almost all of her time with the new friends. When university finished, she moved in with a few of them but now two of them were married, one was currently in Bali and the fourth had died in a car accident. Then shed just lived alone, occasionally pulling people but mostly sitting around watching TV and eating. She had a successful career she was a forensic scientist but the rest of her life was fairly dull and empty. Lucy feigned happiness whenever she met the old crew again; pretended that everything was OK and she was having a great life. But they were not fooled. They all knew. So Harriet must be really pregnant by now! Whens it due again? she said, not wishing to continue down the line of ex-boyfriends and weight issues. February, said Tasha. Something like the eighth? I cant remember. I just wish shed come alone. But now shes married, I guess we cant escape him. Hes such a knob, sighed Lucy. But, you know, at least they have each other. Thats something. It certainly is something, nodded Tasha. She switched the radio on and the two of them began singing along to Slade. Michael had actually been driving quite calmly. It was now about ten oclock and they were making good time. Christian had been very quiet so far. Whats up? said Michael. He looked at Christian for a moment, who was chewing his lip. Im just so nervous about meeting your friends, he said. Its like meeting your parents, but scarier. You havent met my parents either. I know, but this is eight people all judging me in one go. Youre a teacher. You have thirty people judge you on an hourly basis. And those people cant even vote. I know, I know, nodded Christian. But do you know what I mean? After what youve said. Im scared of Ellie. Dont be, laughed Michael. Her bark is worse than her bite. But it is her you will need to impress the most. I value her opinion above that of any of the others. Tell me again about them, said Christian. Ellies tough, Daves quiet, Michael began, counting them off by lifting various fingers from the steering wheel. Louise worries a lot and drinks a lot, Lucys fat, Tashas a slag, Harriets annoying, Matts a dick and Rob is Louises brother who I dont know all that well. They sound charming, Christian raised one eyebrow. Well, they have bad points too, smirked Michael. Why are you so cruel about your friends? How can you even call them friends? Oh come on, laughed Michael. I do love them all, so much. Well, maybe not Harriet and Matt, but the rest of them. We do all love each other but we just always take the piss out of each other. Its just what we do. Im sure they talk about me behind my back too, laughing at my hair which I know is bad, or discussing how Im useless at holding down relationships present company excepted or theyre talking about that old joke we had about me having enormous balls. You dont have enormous balls, said Christian. No, but for some reason we had this joke that I had massive balls, explained Michael. Like really massive. The sort of balls that affect my walk, or I could use for pillows. Like having two space hoppers between my legs. OK, I get it, Christian sounded disgusted. All Im saying is, dont try to hard with them, said Michael, taking a serious tone. Were an easy going bunch, and we like to keep things light and fun. That wasnt what you were saying at all. Well, Ive said it. Now stop worrying and get ready to enjoy the day. Its Louises house so there will be endless alcohol. Oh, and on no account talk to Matt about his job or you wont get away. |
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Brilliant, Bean. Loved it. Don't stop writing.
Quote:Sounds just like a car I know. Quote:You mean a pause that lasted nine months and resulted in a lot of screaming. Love the Matt & Harriet section. Quote:Oh God, why???????!!! Quote:You don't need the 'k'. Quote:And that's been overused frequently in books in the past. But overall, pretty damn good, Bean. |
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Quote: I can imagine Ellie and Dave having a lot of pauses exactly like that to be honest. |
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Quote: Lies! American lies! Oh, wait, you're British...never mind then. I want to read it, but I've been having severe problems with my head and vision recently, that all that black text on a white background induces severe eye strain. |
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Put it in Word and do that blue background / white text thing?
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Stick it in TextEdit and have the robovoices read it to you, with all their monotonous mispronunciation.
I liked it. I'm sure I would have liked it more if I knew the people firsthand, but you've done a pretty good job of characterizing them so they're accessible. The only thing about which I would caution you is the exposition it's a bit heavy-handed in places, especially near the start. I know, they're all necessary details, but they do come pretty thick and fast. "Rob was her brother" springs to mind you could shorten it to "her brother Rob" and stick it in the preceding sentence, possibly perhaps maybe? ----- ~ Wolfgang Kaiser, Zeppelin Vigilante ~ "Kidnapping Nubile Victorian Ladies Since 1867" |
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Not a big fan of the robovoices? Oh, I am surprised.
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Quote: Yar, makes more sense. This is all a first draft anyway. But thanks. |
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Here's some more! I've also added a prologue of us on Christmas Eve, but aged as we
are now, and will add an epilogue of our nineteen-year-old selves on Boxing Day, just to frame it.
"Happy Christmas Lou," he said. "And to you," smiled Louise, applying blusher. "I put your presents under the tree. I figured we'd just do ours when everyone does them all. If you want to do it now though, we can do?" "No, it's cool, I'll go put yours under the tree as well," he nodded. "I've got two cards as well. From Luke. He sent them a while ago, before … well, I'll put them down there too." He left. Louise stopped her beauty regime and slouched back in the chair. She didn't want to think about her cousin, not today. Luke had been serving in Iraq and she'd spent every moment worrying about him. A few weeks ago he was caught in an explosion. He had been rushed home and was now in a hospital in central London. Louise had been to visit him once but couldn't go back. She'd been distraught at what she'd found. He was badly burnt and had had a foot amputated. He was being fed by a drip. He was still in a coma. The doctors kept saying that it was touch and go and they didn't know if he would make it. Louise had resigned herself to the fact that he wouldn't. But today was a day of peace, love and celebration. And excessive drinking. Louise was determined that today was going to be a good day.
Since Ellie had turned on the radio about half an hour ago, Dave had wondered if she had purposely talked over his mention of marriage. She never asked to do anything, she just did it. Now he thought about it, almost every time he'd mentioned actually doing something about their engagement, she'd changed the topic or said she was too busy to talk about it. Maybe he had to try and force the issue. Now seemed a good enough time as any. She couldn't escape from the car. "Ellie?" Dave said gingerly. She opened her eyes slightly and sighed. "You know we're engaged?" "Yes, of course Dave," she said, looking anywhere but at him. "When I proposed … I hoped that we would be engaged to be married," he said, choosing his words very carefully and wishing he'd worn another layer so that her nails wouldn't reach his skin should she suddenly lash out. "But it's been four years. Do you want to marry me?" "Of course," came the reply. But it wasn't the sort of reply Dave wanted. The words were right, but the tone wasn't. "Ellie?" Dave knew he was crossing several boundaries here. He was taking control, and Ellie did not like it one bit. "Look, Dave," It was Ellie who was now choosing her words carefully. "Of course I want to marry you. Who wouldn't? But not right now. I'm not ready. Can we talk about this another time?" "No, let's talk about it now…" "ANOTHER TIME, DAVE!" Ellie shouted. She rarely raised her voice. She turned the radio up and turned round to look out of her window. Dave knew he'd pissed her off. He'd crossed a line that had never been crossed before. The relationship had, at first, been fairly even. Ellie had, of course, had a certain degree of power over Dave, something that pleased Michael because it meant he was no longer the one under the thumb. The cracks had begun to show more prominently during the early years of university. While Ellie's parents were paying her accommodation for the first year, Dave was struggling with his overdraft well into his second. He was officially skint, and yet still couldn't bring himself to say no when Ellie asked him to come and visit from Exeter, or help her take stuff to or from university when her parents were working and she was coming home for the holidays. By the time Dave had reached his third year, he put his foot down. His course - astrophysics - was important too him. He loved Ellie, certainly, unquestionably, but he wasn't paying over three grand a year to hurry his work in between visiting her in London. Ellie had agreed. Her design course kept her busy almost all the time, hardly ever giving her a night off or any free weekends, so Dave still really didn't have an impact, as Ellie was too busy herself. During the holidays, they spent almost all of their time together, never really discussing the future but always content with the cards fate had dealt them. They were in love, and they had a sex life, but no one else saw the spark. They behaved like an old married couple. They had settled for one another, not because they were perfect, but because it worked. As they say, if it isn't broke, don't fix it. Once they had both finished university, they moved in together in Brighton. Dave proposed and after a night of thinking it over (which involved thirteen vodka shots, a bottle of wine, whiskey and heart-to-hearts with Louise, Michael and Harriet), Ellie accepted. That was four years ago. Almost nothing had ever been said about a wedding. If anyone did mention it, it wouldn't be Ellie or Dave. One of their friends would ask about it and Ellie (always Ellie) would say, "Oh, not yet. It's not the right time." Dave would nod along, as if agreeing, but always wondering if she was holding out to see if she'd find someone better. Now, as they sat in car in complete silence, both hearing but not listening to the bubblegum pop song that played on the radio, Dave wondered again - was she waiting for Mr Perfect? Was he really not good enough? A large sign told him that they had just entered East Sussex.
Also driving in silence, and also just entering the county of their youth, was Lucy and Tasha. They'd been talking pretty solidly since Lucy had got in, and they had effectively run out of conversation for a while. Lucy was thinking about one night back in the day where she, Louise and Michael had gone to the park at about ten o'clock one night during the summer and laid on the soft tarmac that crops up in pretty much every child's playground, watching shooting stars. She didn't know why she was thinking about it. She kept smiling to herself, as it had been one of the funniest nights of her life. Michael had been on top form - he'd actually been funny. They had first discussed a Billy Connolly skit he'd seen about how great it would be if, when people farted, they produced the word "fart" in their own voice instead of the usual noise. They'd tried it in various accents. Michael had then proceeded to do impressions of lots of people they knew. He was also an expert at mimicking body language, particularly the way people walked. Lucy started laughing out loud. "What?" said Tasha, turning to look at her. "Oh, nothing," smirked Lucy. "Just thinking about the old days. Don't you find it weird that we're all still such good friends? Even though we barely see each other anymore." "We know each other too well," said Tasha. "It's just so easy that I don't think any of us can be bothered to start again. I think it's nice to have people around who remember you as gawky teenagers." "Sometimes I wish we all still lived close by," said Lucy. "But I think today is going to be really good. We've spent birthdays and new years together, but never Christmas. Christmas is a big thing. It's like something only really good friends do." "I guess," said Tasha. "I didn't really think about it like that. Mum really wanted me to go home again this year, and I really wanted to as well, but Louise was so bloody convincing. It'll be nice. I'll help cook too. I can't drink since I'm driving back tonight." "I'm staying a few days," said Lucy. "I'll get the train up to see my family before New Years. Should be nice." "I've got to get home and then I'm coming back down in the New Year to see mine," said Tasha. "I couldn't get time off work." Tasha was an interior designer, and a very popular one at that. Louise, Ellie, Michael and Sammy, another old friend, all had interiors designed by Tasha. "Do you think today is going to be explosive?" she said, slowly, as if worrying for real. Lucy looked at her and the two of them burst out laughing. "I'd be very upset if it wasn't," Lucy said through her laughs. "We can't do anything with a large dollop of drama."
Matt was loading bags of presents into the back of Harriet's orange Nissan Micra. He still could not drive and they couldn't really afford for him to have lessons with the new baby on the way. Harriet was therefore driving the fairly short journey, much to her annoyance. "Harriet! Come on, we need to go!" Matt called back up to the house. A neighbour's curtain twitched. Harriet emerged from the house in a green skirt and a beige top and got halfway down the path before returning to the door to lock it. "Have we got everything?" she said as she arrived at the car. "Presents? Wine? Bombay mix?" Harriet had been craving Bombay mix all the time since getting pregnant. Matt nodded and checked the things off on his fingers in as she said them. Harriet got into the drivers seat (with some degree of difficulty), strapped on her seatbelt (with another degree of difficulty) and turned the key in the ignition. It was already in gear and so stalled before it had gone anywhere. "Bloody hell," she muttered. Matt had got in the car now too and put the seat back as far as it would go to accommodate his legs. "Ready?" he said. Trying best to keep calm, Harriet managed to get the car started and began to drive, heading towards a Christmas with her friends and husband. Harriet and Matt had met at a New Years Eve party back when Harriet was in sixth form. Matt was four years older and they had never seen one another before that night. Their relationship had been rocky: very rocky. But, they had managed to convince themselves that they wouldn't ever be able to get anyone else and so, after Harriet had finished at university, Matt proposed, Harriet said yes, and they married later that same year. Sammy, Harriet's former best friend, had been the maid of honour, and Matt's old friend Craig had been best man. It had been a simple ceremony with the reception at Harriet's old family home. Michael's plus one, his old friend Katherine, had caught the bouquet and had indeed gone onto marry a few months later. She was now on her third marriage at the relatively young age of twenty-six. They were a good reminder to all of the others that there was someone out there for everyone, but also an annoyance because they had one another whereas almost everyone else was permanently single. Harriet and Matt had married and it was working. Not perfectly, but working nonetheless. Harriet stopped at the red traffic light and began biting her thumbnail, waiting for the green light.
In the beautiful coastal town of Eastbourne, not far from where everyone was heading, Sammy, sat shivering in the armchair in her Tasha-designed living room wearing a pink nightie and a silk dressing gown, staring at the small pile of presents beneath the tree. Lysander wasn't home. It was Christmas and he hadn't come home. Bastard. Sammy felt the tears begin to run down her face and didn't stop them as they came thicker and faster.
At 10.59 exactly, Christian pulled into Coronation Close and parked in front of number 17, the four-bedroom house in which he was to spend his Christmas Day. He thought it was impressive and was instantly struck by the idea of Louise being a rather glamorous and rich young woman with too much money and not enough sense that led her to buy a huge house that she lived alone in. He didn't know that she was a tax cheat but had so far been undiscovered and so was able to live in express comfort. Only Michael and Ellie knew her tax secret and although they both felt it unfair and like they should turn her in, they knew that if they could get away with it, they would do it too. "This is it then?" said Christian. Neither he nor Michael had moved from the car. "Yup, Louise's house," nodded Michael. "I love this place. It'll be good to have it filled with people." He opened the door of the car and went round to the boot. Christian popped it open and got out to join him, locking the door again. "Are you OK?" said Michael. He gently kissed Christian on the cheek. "It's going to be fine." "I know," smiled Christian. "It's just funny. The first Christmas I spend away from the family and I spend it with total strangers." "I'm not a total stranger," said Michael, lifting two of the bags out of the car. "And anyway, you're not getting out of it now. They'll love you, I know they will." Christian smiled again and removed the other bag from the boot of the car. He slammed it shut and the pair of them walked up the garden path. Instead of following it round the corner, Michael hopped over the flowerbeds and rang the doorbell with his nose. About twenty seconds passed before there was a noise in the hall. Louise then opened the door. "Hey, lovely," said Michael as she opened the door wider. He stooped to kiss her on the cheek and she put her arms round him loosely. "Sorry about the delay," she said. "Happy Christmas by the way. Yeah, I took my time because I could feel a fart brewing and didn't want to open the door and fart at the same time and have Christian forever associate me with farting on our first meeting." "So you thought you'd tell us about it instead?" laughed Michael. He looked at his boyfriend behind him, who was blushing slightly. "This is Christian, by the way." "Hello," said Louise. "So we finally meet. Michael's told us a lot about you. You're more attractive in real life. Not that you look awful in photographs or anything. I mean…" "Have you started on the booze really early today or something?" said Michael, raising an eyebrow. "I may have had a Baileys with breakfast," said Louise. "Anyway, come in and close the door, don't let the heat out." "You could not have sounded more like your mother just then," said Michael. Christian was busy taking his shoes off but a yelp told him that Michael had just been hit for that comment. Christian followed Michael and Louise into the living room. It was a large room with a fake tree decorated with blue and silver tinsel and ornaments, three large green overstuffed sofas, a chunky TV with a stack of DVDs next to it, and a computer desk with a fairly old computer on it. An electric fire hummed away in the corner. "Just bung the presents under the tree then?" said Michael. "Yeah, sure thing," nodded Louise. "Do you want a drink? Tea? Water? Baileys?" "Cuppa tea would be lovely," smiled Christian. "Three sugars." Louise looked at him and smiled and spent just a split second too long staring before going off to the kitchen. Christian had the distinct feeling that she had been studying him, from his strawberry blonde hair to his thick grey socks. He felt like a piece of meat. He moved over to Michael with his bag. "She was just totally judging me," he whispered. "Yes, and?" said Michael, slipping the last present under a low-hanging silver bauble. "Drink, Michael?" Louise called through from the kitchen. "Baileys is good, thanks," Michael called back. He then lowered his voice again and said, "Of course she was examining you. It's what we do. I think she's a little disappointed you're not black." "What? Why?" Christian was confused. "Oh, long story, I'll tell you later," Michael smirked. "Shall I put your presents under here too?" He began ferreting around in Christian's carrier bag and pulling out gifts. "Wait, but she knew I wasn't black - she's seen photos," Christian was lost in this new world and he'd only been here three minutes. "Yeah," said Michael. "I was kidding. But, you know, none of us know what years of alcohol abuse have done to her brain - maybe she thought you'd be black in person. Look, I'm not going to discuss this now, let's go get our drinks." They didn't need to because as Michael said the words in hushed tones, Louise appeared with a cup of tea and small glass of Baileys. "I'm amazed you have a glass that small," said Michael, taking it. "I thought it was all just pint glasses for wine and vodka at the Hall residence." "Oh shut up," Louise hit him again. "I am not as bad as you think. Everyone else drinks just as much as I am. See what it did to Lucy." "Indeed," nodded Michael. Christian had settled into one of the sofas with his tea, watching this strange conversation continue over him. Michael carried on, "I wonder if she's got even bigger. I still feel guilty about calling her Fatty in the old days." "Well, we always said one day she'd get really big to spite us," laughed Louise. The doorbell rang. Michael turned to face Christian. "If that's her, we were discussing New Year," he said. Christian simply nodded, scared that one wrong move would land him in some sort of mess that he couldn't get out of. Michael seemed like a completely different person already. Louise seemed nice enough but she had definitely been scrutinising him like he was a car she was thinking about buying.
Louise opened the door to find Ellie standing on the doorstep, empty-handed and wrapped in a thick black coat. "Happy Christmas," she said, kissing her oldest friend on the cheek. "Where's Dave?" "He parked round the corner," Ellie pointed absent-mindedly over her shoulder. "He's just getting the presents. He'll ring the doorbell when he's here." With that, Ellie stepped over the threshold, kicked off her shoes and wandered into the kitchen. All Louise could do was think, Poor old Dave. In the kitchen, Ellie was already helping herself to a glass of white wine, pouring from a bottle she'd found in the fridge. "Are you and Dave OK?" said Louise, concerned for her friend. She may have control over Dave but it was slightly out of character to leave him quite like that. "We're fine," said Ellie. She took a big gulp from the glass and began refilling it. "Who else is here?" "Rob's still getting ready but Michael's here," Louise paused, "with his boyfriend. Fairly attractive, not bad considering the rest of our dating record looks like a Who's Who of losers and wankers. No offence to Dave." Ellie ignored the "No offence" and Louise took this to mean that things were not OK. Thankfully Louise was spared from trying to rekindle the conversation as Michael appeared in the doorway. "Hey there Ellie," he beamed, pulling her into a one armed hug as he approached her. "Merry Christmas and all that jazz." "Merry Christmas indeed," said Ellie. "I hear the unfortunate soul that has been subjected to your sweaty brand of love over the past six months is here. Do I get to meet him?" "If you mean my boyfriend, yes you do," said Michael. He offered his hand for Ellie to take, but Ellie ignored it and instead led the way into the living room. Louise followed behind them.
"So, this is the man himself?" said Ellie. Christian had jumped up at her arrival and slopped a bit of his tea over the rim of the mug. It hit the carpet, leaving a small dark mark. He tried to rub his foot over it, but Louise said, "Just leave it, I'm always staining everything." Ellie approached him and offered her hand. Christian shook it. Ellie liked the look of Christian. He was attractive and very much "Michael's type" - innocent looking and blonde. He looked incredibly nervous, like he was shaking the hand of a hungry lioness. "I don't bite," Ellie smiled. She approved, and she didn't approve of anything (or anyone) Michael did. "So, you must be Christian? We've heard so much about you. What's-his-name wouldn't shut up about you." Ellie could sense Michael rolling his eyes behind her. Someone knocked on the door and Louise hurried out to answer it. "And you must be Ellie?" said Christian - the first words he'd said. He had a voice not unlike the South East lilt of everyone else, but with the tiniest trace of Scottish. "I can tell because your hands are just the right size to match up to the scar on Michael's forearm." There was a pause. Ellie wasn't sure how to take this. She looked at Michael and said, "Well, he's got your humour. Well done." She turned back to Christian. "Good to meet you at last." "Where's Dave?" said Christian. "I wanted to meet him too. I mean, I want to meet all of you, but, I dunno, you know." "Yes, where is Dave?" Michael interrupted. "Probably him at the door now, go and help him," Ellie said, not looking in the direction from which resonated the sounds of a physicist struggling with three bags of presents. Without another word, Michael slipped out of the room to help his best friend's fiancé. Christian looked shocked. "How do you do that? I can't even get him to stop clipping his toenails on the sofa!" "It's a gift," said Ellie, choosing one of Michael's favourite catchphrases. "I'll see if I can't pass on some of it to you by the end of the day." Dave, Michael and Louise entered the room and began putting the gifts under the tree. Ellie clicked her fingers and Dave and Michael both turned round. "Car keys," she said, holding her palm out. Michael returned to the matter of the gifts, but
Dave reached into the front pocket of his jeans and extracted a single key ring with a silver key on it. He stood up, dropped it into Ellie's hand and then
crouched again to continue helping Michael. Ellie put the key in her pocket and sipped her wine again.
Everything we do is a choice. Oatmeal or cereal, highway or side streets, kiss her or keep her, we
make choices and we live with the consequences. If someone gets hurt along the way we ask for forgiveness, it's the best anyone can do.
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