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I figure you're looking for pointers as well as praise, though, so I might suggest one or two despite myself: Line six is a fantastic simile, but using "apart" instead of "away" might just serve to hammer the point home a little more, and one could always pluralize "hour"... ]]> feeds@yuku.com (Wolfgang Kaiser) http://seventhsanctumsector.yuku.com/sreply/17599 Sat, 12 Apr 2008 21:07:34 GMT http://seventhsanctumsector.yuku.com/topic/2065/t/The-Walrus.html

Silently the Walrus walks
The margins of the sea;
His old black eyes are full of wrath
His muzzle, whiskery.

His flesh is raw, his tusks as long
As an hour away from thee;
His trumpet is a haunting cry
That rocks the Polar Sea.

He stalks without impediment,
(A league beneath the sea)
The clams beneath the sediment
Sleeping chthonically.

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