Prologue to the book I'm writing

Re: Prologue to the book I'm writing

feeds@yuku.com (Reznor58) — Sun, 23 Mar 2008 18:22:34 GMT

It's awesome! I'm a big fan of mythology...it's really interesting though. I want to see where you go with this story.

Re: Prologue to the book I'm writing

feeds@yuku.com (CMills22) — Mon, 03 Mar 2008 05:39:20 GMT

I suppose I could make a joke of the first lines or something, and thanks for warning me about the mix up in tenses. I'll get to work on them pronto.

Re: Prologue to the book I'm writing

feeds@yuku.com (Lethe Gray) — Sun, 02 Mar 2008 14:17:54 GMT

That first descriptive line is .... very very long Somewhat convoluted, though I suspect that may be the point.

Also, unless it is intentional, you might want to make sure you're in the right tense the whole way through, there are some passages in past and present tense. (again, though, given the subject, it might be intentional )

Pretty cool!

Prologue to the book I'm writing

feeds@yuku.com (CMills22) — Sun, 02 Mar 2008 09:45:09 GMT

Gradually anyway. Vortex_Duck would have already seen a version of this, but it's undergone a few slight changes when I altered a few things with the overall setting. Anywho, tell me what you guys think and whether it needs any changes.

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Prologue: The Forge

Sparks flew like a meteor shower in a clear night sky as Carta's hammer fell upon the white hot star-iron that lay held in...